12-31-2015, 11:29 AM
(12-31-2015, 11:21 AM)Robyn Wrote: Your portrayal of a dark and cruel Nick went too far for my taste. I don’t mean that as a negative reflection on your exploration of this different characterization. In fact, I applaud your commitment to exploring just how dark and cruel Nick might become given the right circumstances.
It was Adalind’s reaction to Nick that I couldn’t quite wrap my head around. While her body might respond to his machinations, the heart and mind not so much. Nick established his mindset with “You're here and I... I need someone right now” and “Besides you owe me”. Regardless of how Adalind’s feelings might be changing/growing toward Nick, his assertions and behavior don’t welcome new possibilities, at least not any that Adalind has a say about.
Again, I want to say that my comments & opinion aren’t meant as a negative reflection on your story’s direction, and again, I applaud your commitment to exploring just how dark and cruel Nick might become given the right circumstances.
Thank you for your comments and observations. I can understand what your saying about Adalind's reaction and respond with my take on this was that Adalind didn't realize the extent of Nick instability at the time or how far he actually would go until matters weren't under her control anymore.
Of course I accept your disagreement though, it presents an interesting counter argument that mediates what's going on in my head. Basically constructive criticism which is much appreciated.
Thanks